tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1254723313057004476.post6943875063538968384..comments2023-05-19T10:40:28.162+01:00Comments on Bankyschl: 100wc by Toluwani P4Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1254723313057004476.post-40528359409330182912012-07-11T18:38:32.962+01:002012-07-11T18:38:32.962+01:00I am so sorry for Jason! I have been through embar...I am so sorry for Jason! I have been through embarrassing situations like that and I know how he must have felt. Great job connecting your reader to your protagonist.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1254723313057004476.post-32196211629292961022012-07-10T14:34:55.260+01:002012-07-10T14:34:55.260+01:00Hello Toluwani,
This would be a very tragic exper...Hello Toluwani,<br /><br />This would be a very tragic experience for an athlete who had trained for four year. Simply forgetting to tie a shoelace would not only be embarrassing, it would be upsetting. Well done. :)<br /><br />Remember to reread your story before posting. There are some minor errors you might have seen. Rereading and editing a story is a skill used by all good writers.<br /><br />I hope you keep entering the 100WC.<br /><br />@RossMannell<br />Teacher, NSW, Australiarmannellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10325881715643049499noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1254723313057004476.post-85687198050043083652012-07-09T15:38:42.839+01:002012-07-09T15:38:42.839+01:00Oh! What a pity that Jason's shoelace got unti...Oh! What a pity that Jason's shoelace got untied. He may need some encouragement to continue but he should not give up.<br />Please let him know that he can still make it. Thanks for this story.Mrs. Bankolenoreply@blogger.com