tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1254723313057004476.post6870246864331745290..comments2023-05-19T10:40:28.162+01:00Comments on Bankyschl: Suddenly I saw by Ejiro P4Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1254723313057004476.post-64782565503274901142012-06-19T16:16:48.456+01:002012-06-19T16:16:48.456+01:00Wow Ejori, you really showed that this was a terri...Wow Ejori, you really showed that this was a terrifying event to be happening. I like the way that you 'screamed and shouted' to show your fear. Why do you think the parents were so calm?<br /><br />If you had more than 100 words, it would have been good to develop the description of the devastation the tornado caused.<br /><br />Thanks for posting,<br />Mrs Ratcliffe (Team 100 WC)J Ratcliffehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05633712559600610929noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1254723313057004476.post-86294577011568561262012-06-19T14:16:14.769+01:002012-06-19T14:16:14.769+01:00I enjoyed this piece of writing Ejiro. You paint ...I enjoyed this piece of writing Ejiro. You paint the scene well. You could have described the damage to the house in more detail. Thank you for your 100WC entry.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com